More Paper Problems!

I have been working on my paper and rearranged a few paragraphs along with sentences. I just changed many things in my paper and it still seems to be a little out of place. My introduction is starting out strong, but the rest of the body needs organization. How can I find a better way to do this? I watched my episode again and I also watched another episode of Angel to get more ideas which helped me with gaining more understanding. I am going to integrate more quotes because it is definitely helping me build off from them. However,what is the best way to conclude the paper? I am stuck towards the end of my paper right now because I cannot find the correct way to conclude my topic.

Quote/Supportive Sentences

I picked a paragraph with some quotes and sentences that back it up. It is within the middle body of my paper.

The whole significance of the second episode is that Angel was successful for his task of destroying a demon. Angel realizes that he does have the power to do good things and deeds for people who need the help. He understands that he does not have to hide from the world forever because of his previous life. Compared with the first episode, Angel is still uncomfortable accepting the new life he has come onto in L.A. It seems that with his friends, Doyle and Cordelia, Angel has developed a trust for them and is slowly opening up. Especially after the love relationship between him and Buffy, Angel has not fully recovered. For him not to have a beating heart, Angel still ended up with a broken heart. He thought he found a life set for him and, instead, ended up with a life filled with remorse and pain.

As I continued to write, I found more supportive examples to relate to what I am trying to say.

Paper Problems

I have some great ideas for my paper, but my problem is putting it all together. I am still having some difficulties with my thesis statement. For this reason, I cannot focus on the main topic. However, I think that once I have my thesis, it will help me grasp more ideas and details into my paper. I found most of my significant parts, but they need to be organized within my paper.

I also need to make better use of my sources within my paper because I am not explaining them very well. For instance I say, "In the second episode of “Lonely Hearts”, Angel is confronted with a situation where a chain of killings involve people who are single. " This paragraph was too general and short. I barely explained the episode and it seems confusing if the reader has not seen the second episode of Angel.

My transitions can also be better from paragraph to paragraph. Some sentences seem to be personal opinions and the goal is to avoid that. For example I write, " I analyze that Angel looks strong and aggressive on the outside." This is clearly what I think and most of my sentences are using this personal pronoun. I will definitely improve this mistake on the final paper.

WB 3: Are You A LEADER ?

I have been researching about the topic of leadership and how it is seen in today's society. There are two website articles I found relating to my topic, both of which have a strong tone of confidence.The articles talk about failing leadership and how to become a better leader. One author,Mark Sanborn, writes about some reasons why leaders fail. He uses creative text to outline the main reasons to why leaders in our society are slow failing. There are six main reasons, bold and capitalized, saying leaders fail because they forget their focus, there is poor communication, fear of not succeeding, reputation is slipping, he/she is unable to care for his/herself, or lost love. He explains each reason using well-known leaders, such as Donald Trump or President Richard Nixon, saying,"Donald Trump, paragon of the real estate world, files for bankruptcy. Richard Nixon, 37th U.S. President, resigns the presidency over the Watergate scandal" (Online). Sanborn clearly states that these people worked hard to the highest point and made a mistake which risked almost everything they had.

As for Niamh Arthur's article, he writes a more steady article about becoming a better leader. Arthur uses a simple outlook on his main points and minimal graphic design. He presents his argument in a numerical order. I like the tone he uses because it is more motivating. Arthur belives, "All great leaders start with a vision" (Online). The rest of his points back up this particular saying because good leaders need to be followers first in order to have an idea of what to do in general. People have to want to be a leader and it comes with commitment.

The first article seemed to be better at persuasion because Sanborn gave prime examples where the public can relate to. Arthur's article was simple and to the point, but too general. However, I see that to be a leader, you have to be yourself. From both articles, they aim to say that anyone can be a leader. It is the effort that counts.


Arthur, Niamh. " 5 Steps to Become a Leader, When You Feel Like a Follower." Self Growth. 1996. Selfgrowth.com. Web. 23 Oct. 2009.<http://http://www.selfgrowth.com/articles/5steps_to_become_a_leader_when_you_feel_like_a_follower#>.

Sanborn, Mark."Why Leaders Fail." Leading Articles. 2007. Leadership Now. Web. 23 Oct. 2009.
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"When The Stars Go Blue" by The Corrs and U2

U2 is one of my favorite bands that I enjoy listening to. I found interest in U2 because my family is a huge fan of them and it eventually grew on me. One of the songs that I love is called "When The Stars Go Blue". It is a beautiful song and the beat is mesmerizing. The song is also quite romantic and I never get tired of listening to it.
In the beginning of the song, it is about dancing on the streets with wooden shoes in a wedding gown."Dancing where the stars go blue/Dancing where the evening fell/Dancing in your wooden shoes/In a wedding gown." Right away, the song is already filled with love. This is a dreamy picture when I imagine the lyrics in reality.
There is a part in the lyrics where I find it standing out compared to the other words in the song. "Are you happy now?". I thought about this and I can relate to this. Everyone has gone through a relationship and they are both good and bad. Sometimes, we just have to really think about the life before us and the people in it. That is when we appreciate what we all have and realize that, yes, we are happy!
In the chorus, it says "Where do you go when you're lonely?/Where do you go when you're blue?." Again, this part makes us think about our lives and the people we care about. We look to the people we can depend on. When I feel down, I talk to my family about it because they are the people I can always rely on when I am stuck in any given situation. Whether it is a family member or a significant other, we all should understand that no matter what, we are not alone.

Fear: The Princess Screamed Once

Compared to previous episodes, Buffy has transformed from this young teenage girl into a mature woman in college. I see that she has this strange dream and an interest for Riley. Buffy tries to make sense of it right away. The voices of the town are suddenly stolen and people are forced to find a different way to communicate to each other. Instantly, I see Buffy striving to solve for the solution. She is commited to what she is set for and Buffy puts every ounce of her heart into being the slayer. Buffy does find a way to beat the Gentlemen and the article explains the little details I missed when I watched "Hush".

In order to defeat the Gentlemen, a human voice must be screamed or the voice of the princess is supposed to be screamed. As Wilcox says in the article,"Buffy is a princess. Yes, she is beautiful; yes, she is willing to die for her people" (Wilcox 149). This is true because Buffy is willing to put up her life for the town. Luckily, she has Riley there to help her. However, with or without Riley, she would have gone through with trying to defeat the Gentlemen. I feel that it is quite brave for Buffy, especially since the day she chose to take up the job as a slayer.

Moeller- Is it Art

The episode of "Hush" is unique apart from all other episodes in Buffy. Not only does it incorporate artistic thinking to have created the storyline, but it captures the whole meaning behind art. Most of the episodes are about demons and monsters of the original sort. Here, writers decided to include fairytale creatures that are the "monster" type known as The Gentlemen. The reason I think this idea is altogether artistic is because, at first thought, I would not have guessed any Buffy episode would deal with fairytale creatures. The whole silent act was clever because it was something new for the audience. It was difficult for me to watch the show because I found it challenging to watch something with little noise compared to a normal show with loud action. As Moeller writes,"It is visually sound and somewhat challenging in terms of not falling too deeply into the pit of TV sameness-to a moderate degree" (Moeller 106). That is what art is all about, new things and brilliant ideas!

Bridges- Grimm Realities

When a person comes to a particular age and feels all grown up, certain things begin to seem childish. There are no more fairytales or bedtime stories, and monsters turn into silly stories. Almost every day, adults have to make big decisions and they have huge responsibilities. Where in this case, Buffy Summers was still a young teenage girl still trying to figure out her identity. She knew she was still a child! For instance, Buffy said,"We both know there are real monsters" (Bridges 93).

However, Buffy was confronted with a decision that would change her life. She agreed to be a slayer, which made her have to grow up almost right away. From episode to episode, you see Buffy mature from this vulnerable girl to a fearless woman ready to fight any evil force. Of course Buffy had a chance to live up her teenage years, she just lived it up in a special way by doing good for the world.

Buffy Episode "Hush"

As I was watching this episode, I see that Buffy has matured from that average high school girl into this woman in college. Buffy has taken up the pathway that was set for her and she has grown into her powers that she did not believe she capable of.

Here, Buffy and her friends are confronted with a particular situation where everyone in the town has lost their voice. I found this hard to watch the episode because it is altogether strange to watch something silent. This brings up a huge problem because,without communication, it is difficult to get anything done. Communication is a big part of living within a society because it brings people closer and everyone has the opportunity to talk things out. For instance,Buffy and Willow decides to better their communication by buying dry erase boards. The girls can write out what they are trying to say. Even the town went through a moment of panic, but people found ways to keep their communication alive.

With her friends and Riley, Buffy is able to figure out that the Gentlemen are the enemies in the town. They are fairytale creatures and come into a town to steal voices so that people cannot scream. In the night, the Gentlemen come out and cut out hearts of the people in town. Their goal is to cut out at least seven hearts.

To kill the Gentlemen, a human voice must be heard and screamed out. Together, Buffy and Riley work together to fight against this evil force. They are surprised to find each other at the same place, but are grateful for each other's presence because teamwork is much better than accomplishing a mission alone.

I know that a life without communicating to one another would be impossible to live in because this is how we make each day work. It is good to see that the town worked together, especially Buffy and her friends. The best way was to remain calm and find the solution, which Buffy succeeded at. Now that Riley and Buffy know who they really are, I wonder if they are interested in being in a relationship because Riley did say Buffy was "special".

Freewriting 2

"Angel experienced both redemption and romance in the arms of one least likely to love a bloodsucker-vampire slayer Buffy Summers, and in the process learned that a heart without a beat can still be broken" (Buffy the Vampire Slayer:Buffy and Angel #1 Romance Hall of Fame Sci-Fi Couples Category).

The relationship between Buffy and Angel is beyond incredible because she slays vampires and Angel is a vampire in this situation. It is remarkable of how Buffy gave her heart to him and this was probably a huge moment for the both of them. Angel returned his love for her and they somehow knew the consequences for their decision that were coming. Angel and Buffy wanted it to work out, but they saw the pain that was coming to get them. Love is an emotion you cannot block out. It is a passion that a person has to decide either to take it all in or suffer with the rejection. Here, Buffy and Angel took that risk to save themselves from wondering what life would be like if they turned such an opportunity down.

Freewriting 1

Angel came from this life of regrets and remorse. He is a vampire with a regained soul. Even with his courageous figure and mighty powers, Angel's state of mind seeks a million answers. He is looking for redemption because he is not that normal vampire who is evil. Angel lived through all these experiences involving power, life, and love.

Angel has friends that are behind him. Boyle and Cordelia have been helping him with helping the helpless. These missions to help people are dangerous and his friends are willing to take that risk with him. The way Angel views it is that he could be on the verge of losing another person he cares about. After the love relationship he had with Buffy, Angel is still re-cooperating. The feelings he had for her were beyond anything he thought it could be and it was romance to its highest point.

Sisterly Love

For my blog, I decided to write about my baby sister. She is about sixteen years younger than I am and fifteen years younger than my brother. She is my full sister if anyone was wondering that. Her name is Anh-Thi. My family was running out of names, so they played around with my name and found something they like.

I remember the day when I found out my mom was going to have another baby. This news was very shocking for everyone! My family is huge already and we were going to have another member. I do recall everyone being excited because I know I was. However, my mom was terrified because she could only think of one thing which was the labor pains.

My favorite memory of Anh-Thi was the day she was born because I was extremely ecstatic to see what she looked like. From the day she was born, Anh-Thu is a wonderful baby and she barely cried, even when she was hungry or in need of a diaper change. I always put her to sleep by dancing with her.

After she grew out of being a baby, Anh-Thi started to talk, walk, and notice things around her. My friends were always around to spoil her and shower her with lots of love. She is very mature for her age. Nowadays, she talks with an attitude and her facial expressions are priceless because they make me laugh out of control. Anh-Thi can be mean and she is tough. For a petite girl, she will tell you what is exactly on her mind.

I am glad I have her in my life because it is one of the greatest changes for the family and it is nice to have a new member join the family. I love having her in my life because it is fun to have a sister and she looks up to me frequently. With all of the silly faces she makes and the dramatic attitudes she gives me, I truly love her! She makes my life impossible to be bored!

WB Prompt 2: Thompson Library

Observing this beautiful building with fine details along the walls and structured pathways leading to the entrance gave me this huge vision of imagining what it was like on the inside. Thompson Library was a 1913 building and has been newly renovated into a fine place for academic studies. There are about 1,800 study seats all over the library and more than 250 computers for use. Along with that, there is a cafe inside for the purpose of providing students and staff to relax with the time they are there. Each floor or level within the building is unique in its own way. The tallest level in the library is the eleventh floor. This floor is quite peaceful and has an exquisite view of The Ohio State University campus. The designs on the walls and elevator doors are amazing with words writting in different languages.

Many OSU students come together to study here and share a special bond, whether it is socially or academically. The library has an extremely welcoming atmosphere. Students are encouraged to come to Thompson Library and use the various numbers of resources available because it will be beneficial towards themselves as well as classes. I notice that students challenge themselves to come to the library as a way to accomplish their homework because they seem to focus better here rather than somewhere else. Along with the challenge, I see that motivation plays an important role because by watching your peers and students, a person will have that motivation to do the same and reach for a goal.

Of course, some people do not always come to Thompson Library for schoolwork. As I sat in the main room, there were at least four groups of students chatting away about what they did on the weekend or what they plan on doing for the next weekend. This can lean towards something as both positive and negative. Students should understand that it is critical to study and use the library wisely, but also to have a good time while they are there.

Primary Source 2: Expecting

My second primary source is episode twelve of Angel. In this episode, Cordelia decides to go out for fun on this particular night and meets a guy name Wilson. They engage in some deep conversation,which leads her to taking him back to her apartment. Cordelia and Wilson enjoys a night together where everything seems to be perfect. However, she wakes up the next day with a pregnant belly. Angel and Wesley figures out that the Haxil demon is the father and destroys it by freezing it with liquid nitrogen.



I found this episode surprising that Cordelia was the victim. It is interesting to see that with her outgoing personality, Cordelia is still forced to face a critical event where she is pregnant with demon children. Luckily, she has Angel and Wesley at her side. I see that Angel has somewhat changed from the first episode to this episode because his attitude has softened. As he helps more people, that positive feeling seems to help put his mind at rest and tell him that he is a "good person". I also realize that Angel and Cordelia may appear to be completely diffferent people, but they somehow share a will to find out their true identity and what they want in their life. This concludes some thoughts for future episodes such as what did Cordelia learn from this event and how will she mature as a character in Angel?

Primary Source 1: Lonely Hearts

I watched the second episode of Angel because the start of it caught my interest. It starts with Sharon, a woman who seems innocent, shy, and lonely. She meets a man name Martin in a bar. Martin acts like a typical guy who only has one thing in mind and that is sex. My thought was she was the victim of the whole episode and the person Angel and his friends were looking for. Surpisingly, she is the one who takes advantage of Martin. The tricky thing is that when you keep watching the episode, you see it is just a monster looking for the right body to consume.
However, the significance of the episode is similiar to that of Firefly. It relates to the topic of women using seduction as a way get what they want. Women are shown in both shows as the person who seems like the victim, but really, she is the bad person.

"But She Was Naked..."

Upon watching the video in class, it shows that women are beings full of secrets. Both Saffron and Inara share the art of seduction as a way of accomplishing their tasks. In the video, Saffron obviously shows us that she has some intense skills on luring people. I, personally, did not see the bad side of Saffron because she seemed to be the most innocent person trying to survive.

Relating the video with the article, Saffron and Inara are good at what they do and the significant part is that they finish their job every time. For instance, the situation with Inara and Fess was astounding! She spoke her words wisely, another skill which Saffron also has, and was able to comfort Fess and change his self-esteem.

Fortunately, for Saffron and Inara, they will continue with their ways of seduction because it is easy for them to and people cannot resist it. It is even difficult for Mal to resist Saffron's tricks. The question is how far will Mal go before he risks and jeopardizes his crew?

"Our Mrs. Reynolds"

This episode was intense compared to the first one! I did not find it entertaining from the start. However, when the settlement party began and the crew was starting to drink, that was when my personal attention was caught. Mal was having a good time like the rest of the crew. Unfortunately, his actions brought consequences for him and the crew. A young woman, Saffron, explained to him that she was his new wife. Because her personality seemed to be shy and innocent, Saffron remained on the ship. With her tricky ways, she lured a few crew members including Mal into her trap. Saffron disconnected valuable wires aboard the ship and was able to accomplish whatever she came for because she was able to escape with the shuttle ship. I thought this whole act of Saffron was wild because I did not have the slightest attempt that she was capable of doing anything like this!